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 * ANOREXIA**

Assalamualaikum and a very good morning to Madam Ainol and all my fellow friends. Today I'll talk about anorexia.

Anorexia simply means a loss of appetite or lack of desire to eat. This eating disoder is a psychological disturbance that is characterized by an intense fear of being fat. It usually affects teenage or young adult women. People with anorexia go to extremes and limit the amount of food they take to maintain a dangerously low body weight. But no matter how much weight is lost, it’s never enough and they still thinks that they are fat.

A person with anorexia nervosa may exhibit a number of signs and symptoms. They often hide their condition, so the warning signs are not always easy to spot. Furthermore, anorexics will typically try to explain away their disordered eating behaviors when confronted. But as anorexia progresses, the signs and symptoms become increasingly obvious and difficult to deny. As for examples are dramatic weight loss, feeling fat despite being underweight, obsessed with weight, body shape, or clothing size, obsessed with calories, fats and nutrition and lastly throwing up after eating.

There are many contributing factors, including genetics, individual personality traits, and family environment. Anorexia nervosa is believed to be highlyheritable. Low self-esteem and social emphasis on thinness all increase the risk for this condition. The person with anorexia also obses to be beauty and have physically ideal body. In addition to the cultural pressure to be thin, there are other family and social pressures that can contribute to anorexia. This includes participation in an activity that demands slenderness, such as ballet, gymnastics, or modeling. It also includes having parents who are overly controlling, put a lot of emphasis on looks, diet themselves, or criticize their children’s bodies and appearance. Stressful life events such as the onset of puberty, a breakup, or going away from home can also trigger anorexia.

Early treatment is important and can be very effective. But if it is not treated early, anorexia can become a life long problem. Untreated anorexia can lead to starvation and serious health problem such as osteoporosis, kidney damage, heart problem and even can be fatal. its treatment usually involves psychotherapy, medication, nutrition education, and family therapy.

As the conclusion, we should encourage and support an anorexic friends or family to get treatment. They must meet a health professional to seek for the advice about a healthy lifestyle. That all from me, thank you for your attention.


 * COMMENT:**

= shira says: =

topic:

 * ==== your topic is about anorexia. It is quite interesting and have connection to the audience because we can see many of the students has underweight problem.. ====
 * ==== the topic is informative and the message is clear ====

Introduction
> ==== ====
 * ==== your introduction is really clear, but maybe you can start your speech with interesting intro. ====
 * ==== you only take a few second on introduction. I think, it will effect your allocation time. ====
 * you did explain what the meaning of anorexia, it help the audience to understand your entire speech.

Body

 * ==== the main points is clear. ====
 * ==== you have supporting detail in your point ====
 * ==== you provide good example for your main point. ====
 * ==== you also arrange your point ====

Conclusion

 * ==== you can conclude well ====
 * ==== you give some advise and suggestion at the end of your speech. It will help the audience to learn something.====

Language

 * ==== the language that you use is easy to understand. but, if you want to attract audience, you can learn some bombastic word. ====
 * ==== your language is not sound fluent. ====
 * ==== you need to improve your grammar and pronunciation. ====

Delivery

 * ====I think you more depend on your notes and not really give attention to your audience.====
 * ====sometimes, you forget the point that you need to deliver.====
 * ====you need to alert with your time and practice more to have an effective time management.====
 * ====you look little bit nervous. you should control your nervousness and shyness.====

Fara's comment:

Introduction:
 * My topic is about aneroxia. I choose this topic because there are many university students unstatiesfied with their body weight and shape.
 * My introduction is too simple because I still lack of skill and bombastic word to introduce my topic.

Body:
 * I state the main point clearly with supporting details for each main point.
 * The main point is arranged well.
 * I also include some example for each main point.

Conclusion:
 * I think I conclude well by give some advise to the audience.

Language:
 * i used the simple language so that the audience can understand me and I also can deliver it easily.
 * There are a lot of grammar error and pronunciation in my speech and I should improve it instead do more practice.

Delivery:
 * I don't have self-confidence and shy to speak in front of the audience.
 * Because of my nervous, I lost eyes contact with the audience.
 * I must do some revision and find bombastic word to make it interesting.
 * Sometimes I lost and don't remember the point. So, that way I depend to the notes.


 * AMY: **

** Topic **

 * ====** the topic is appropriate to the audience which is student. nowadays, students especially girls always complianing about their weight. **====
 * ====** the topic is specific about the anorexia and it was delivered clearly. **====

** Introduction **

 * ==== **you need to improve with your introduction. to gain the attention of the audience.** ====
 * ====** you did introduce the topic clearly, but it just need to be more in interesting way. **====
 * ====** you did well in giving the preview of the speech. **====

** Body **

 * ====** the main points is delivered clearly. **====
 * ====** all the points was supported clearly with an excellent points. **====
 * ====** all the patterns in the speech was organize well. **====
 * ====** the connection between the points is good. **====

** Conclusion **

 * ====** you didn't summarize all the points quite well. **====
 * ====** you did put some advice. **====

** Language **

 * ====** the language that you use is simple and easy to understand. **====
 * ==== **there still some grammars error** ====
 * ==== **there still need some improvement with the pronunciation** ====

** Delivery **

 * ====** lack of interaction with the audience and you look nervous. **====
 * ==== **you voice is too slow.** ====
 * ==== **need to improve with the time management** ====
 * ==== **lack of eye contact with the audience** ====